False Omen Ch. 6

[lwhite53]

No, I don't think you need a warning -- it was just, as Silktie said, harrowing. Took a couple of moments to breathe again.

Poor Bushra -- the woman didn't do anything wrong and yet she's dead. More collateral damage for Ruth to wrap her mind around.

[almh]

Oh wow, that was good

[Kirayuki]

Poor Ruth.
(She needs something to go right for her for once. *hint hint* )

Seriously though, your writing's fantastic!

[Fidget]

Great story so far I am really enjoying it, well done

[YourFutureMuse]

Absolutely loved it! Topless Lucas, tense and emotional scenes, the word nemo It had absolutely everything! You are such a talented writer! Once I started reading I was, yet again, completely captured by the story!! All the scenes and character interactions are so believable! Its as if it has come straight out of an episode... if I were Kudos I would hire you straight away

[Beatriz]

wow!! this one was so good!! Poor Ruth, another dead... I didn't see that coming!!
Nail-biting chapter!! Well done!!

[Silktie]

(05-01-2010 07:57 PM)JHyde Wrote:  Maybe I should put a violence warning at the top? I didn't think it was anything more than what the show does.

No, don't think that's necessary. It's just so well written that I can fully identify with the characters' plight. It's not the violence that makes it harrowing, it's the tension you create.

[kirmostar]

OMG I woke up to see Ch 7 so have quickly read this and it's awesome - thank you for the scene with Lucas and Ros in the mens' room - hilarious! Poor Ruth and obv poor Bushra. The tension built was brilliant.
Right, now off to read Ch7.......
Love it!!!

[HellsBells]

Excellent writing , I am really enjoying this story.